[kannon]

Inno. This is definitely one way to make a 16 bar verse look like 32 bars haha. Anyways. I'm not sure I really understand the metaphor you're using here. "City sized lyrics" and "skyscraper melody" seems like a made up thing. The schemes in this are almost non-existent for the first half. It reads much more like spoken word, which I guess some people are cool with. I prefer more structure. Okay, I read it again. I'm hoping that what you're going for is that the soundscapes of the city are its own type of melody in your head, yes? That every person has a story, and every breath has a melody. I like it more if that's what you're doing here. Cause I was kinda lost on my first read through. Still, some of the lines felt a bit dry, and flat. But it's pretty okay now haha.

Dove. Shit. I immediately see why this is such a close battle. This was really well written. But it feels completely unfinished. I feel like you could have easily added an additional 20 bars right before the final two. The writing was crisp, the flow was on point, the visuals were great. But something is missing in it. The action. The meat. You've set a beautiful scene, and then turned off the lights. This could have been a much easier vote had you flushed this piece out...

Shit shit shit. At this point, what it comes down to is an abstract concept that may have been ill-developed, verses a beautifully developed beginning to a story that we are missing all of the meat for. Both ended feeling a little incomplete, but for completely different reasons.

I'm going to edge it to Dove Dozer.