Netcees - View Single Post - Week 1: Timeless vs. Mr. J [Mr. J wins, 7-2.]

Pent uP · 10-06-2014, 01:03 AM

Timeless - decent effort..I felt the verse wasnt very focused on. There were a few moments of clarity here bbut I think the story style needs to be refined. I think you should focus on being a bit more straightforward and mastering the craft.

Mr j -- blah character summary based on pop character. Not a huge fan of these at all. Nothing here was special or popped for attention. I ccouldnt really get into it because of the content matter

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10-06-2014, 01:03 AM	#10
Pent uP Robin Williams of Fallen Victims Join Date: Feb 2013 Posts: 1,502 Battle Record: 25-11 Accomplishments - NC Hall of Fame Champed - Netcees Writers League (2x) - NWL Season 1 - Write Night I - Art of Writing League (2x) - Write Week IV Rep Power: 6862273	Timeless - decent effort..I felt the verse wasnt very focused on. There were a few moments of clarity here bbut I think the story style needs to be refined. I think you should focus on being a bit more straightforward and mastering the craft. Mr j -- blah character summary based on pop character. Not a huge fan of these at all. Nothing here was special or popped for attention. I ccouldnt really get into it because of the content matter Vote timeless Last edited by Pent uP; 10-06-2014 at 01:07 AM.