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Originally Posted by Certain
THIS IS NO CONTEST. SEE, HE LOST FROM THE FIRST GO.
I'LL LEAVE BEANS BAGGED, BUT IT WON'T BE HIS FIRST TIME BEING TOSSED IN A CORNHOLE.
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Nailed it. Could lose the caps but I know that means you're shouting. Someone dock/clowned me in the past for saying ",see" at the end of a line to make it rhyme… so I thought hmm… then after reading the whole thing. I loved the reference to bagging beans, and cornhole.
I feel this battle may have been one that matched up a great Netcee vs. a new up & coming guy. You could've done better, but you tossed this out quickly. Instead of "Overall", I'll say: all together, scored it
8/10.
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Originally Posted by Beans
It's not in ya veins to drop crack & that's why u gay
There's nothing dope insert, but hope he dies that way
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I get the 1st line & it was okay. The second line was okay too. nothing fancy or special about it. After reading it multiple times, i liked it more Scored you a
6/10
My best advice to you is talk to Sharp Nine about punchlines, and study past posts on this forum. One dude gave me the best advice, which write your verse, then read it backwards and make sure it still rhymes and flows.
I think the A,B,B,A format gets unused a lot… which is good, writers should have freedom of what to write… given its 2 lines.
/v Certain
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Originally Posted by Kin
shoulda flipped it so it was relating to a more direct wording of inserting somethin dope in him..
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I believe the term is "plug" or "plugged"... lol