First time reading something from you Kannon, and I must say, despite going the religious route, what you put together was just great. You set a tone in the beginning & then after that laid out the groundwork. I don't think I ever lost interest. Your story flowed from start to finish. The religious theme is one that is overly redundant, but when you're able to put things together, it can work. The last part of the mid section down to the ending was just very cool. It tied everything together. Kudos for a great read. Split, nice to see you back at it. I'm still really waiting to see you put together a fully written piece. For what you dropped in this match, you definitely could have expanded a bit more. Your writing is always a pleasure to read though. But in comparison to your opponent, it just wasn't enough meat to it. I'm all for "dream" concepts/ideas, because you can do so much with it. I know if you wrote more to this picture, it would have been just as good as Kannon's. Hopefully you will do more as the weeks go by. I feel Kannon overall, just put together a more complete story that read smoothly from beginning to end & really brought the picture to life.
MVGT: kannon. Good job by both competitors.
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