[Adonis]

I got muzzel here although I don't think either verse was anything to cheer for in brute honesty. One had heaps of rhymes, no real rhyme scheme just packing lines with as much end rhymes as possible. The other was pretty much a never ending story until it ended abruptly. The writing in all honesty wasn't horrid, but there is much room for improvement. I guess I can say you conveyed some sort of somber emotion well

V/Muzz