Didn't really have any criticism for No Good, other than to come with a fully formed verse next time because this was really great.
Innovator. Man, idk how I feel about this.
A handful of instances of really forced ideas and wording. "drag across pawn" being the worst. You jumped around a lot, it seemed little more an exercise in writing pretty without direction. Somehow, despite almost exclusively referencing things depicted in the topic image, I felt way more detached from your verse than No Good's. It is like the difference between describing a scene and bringing it to life. I just wanna see your writing create something, rather than capture aspects of reality. Sketchwork.
If No Good had brought his verse to any sort of a close, he would have won handily. But i cant justify voting for a verse with less than 1/4 of a story
Wanted more from both
v/ inno
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