Kannon - Decent verse Kan, no doubt this would work better in audio form because your delivery would make it more pristine. The concept was borderline average, the writing stellar. The ending was cool.
Split - This is better on the second read, there's good sensational awareness in your character description. Underdeveloped might be the word to describe it though, I'm not fully convinced you gave this 1 hunnit percent.
My vote goes to kannon.
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