[theMuzzl3]

Certain:

Your vocabulary is off-the-charts. I had to "google define" a few words… which always makes me happy.

Your opening verse caught me by surprise, thinking that Frank's was gonna be hard to beat.

Not sure if "fusal" is a word… but I assumed you meant a definition along the lines of fused and not futsal. Invention of a new word, I assume -- thats a ++.

I don't know if you made up "Martin Graves" but I googled it… I was hoping it wasn't some poor guy that was driven off of this site.

I'm not sure if 352 hearts, 7 drones, and 21 hrs:9 minutes are significant in some way. You either randomly placed them, or they mean something deeper. I didn't look into this.

Again, I know not of the reference to Steven Graves but I'm guessing it has some significance. I see that there is a Steven Graves that is a musician…



Damn, your story line was fantastic. The format was great. There was few rhymes, but that isn't important. Over all creativity is an A++.. If I had read this before reading Franks, he may have received a 9 instead of a 9.5; because I hate giving out 10's. The execution of your idea was fantastic. I hate to vote against Frank because his writing was beautiful… but I could imagine that Martin's execution was the thorns, the drones harvesting still implied hearts grown from a farm or something similar.

Over all, I can not give any criticisms, and I believe you are the favorite to win… if I get past the first round or beyond…. I will put forth full effort if I ever write in competition with you

10/10 = Perfect Score




Frank:

I read your verse first because Certain is certainly the favor to win this contest.

First off, your style is spectacular. I see words that rhyme that aren't in ones, twos, threes, or fours. However, this is netcees, and I doubt others will. Your written words is truly a poem, and a very good one at that. You weren't afraid to make some lines much longer than others, as AOWL shouldn't be necessarily targeted towards writing over timing or beats.

I loved how you rhymed some ending words but had no worry about it, and also rhymed words at random. This is AOWL, and that is a big PLUS.

As I read, I don't know where the leprechaun came from… something I don't understand.

The closing line drew in the flowers and the THORNS, which I was wondering if you'd bring those up, because I saw them. The water leaking from the bottom of the flower pot could also signify her smoking the entire blunt.

The creativity in your verse was what caught me as something that I'd have to read twice. I liked your reference to smoking "pot", which could also refer to the flower pot.

Over all = 9.5/10



I like to vote for the underdog, but in this case, I have to:

/v Certain