Innovator - Visually subtle but effective, lots of imagery chained and interlocked building towards the bigger picture. The one thng striking me as slightly annoying is this haughty combination of meter/wording - comes across as poetry and that isn't a compliment coming from me. Overall I liked this piece though, you did a lot with understated brush strokes.
Dove Dozer - Very uneven and jagged. There's actually a handful of lines that achieve a high standard both in terms of coherent, tight wording and hit that smooth spot mechanically. Criminally underdeveloped and fairly basic in the theme department.
Overall I think Innovator was alone to produce a cohesive reading experience (both actually used similar length if you account for formatting) so my vote goes to him - Dove Dozer provided more of a demo.
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