I am very fond of this kind of children stories, albeit with a sad ending. To summarize this is a nice short story. It would be nice if it you crafted a tale with this kind of language, and with this kind descriptive imagery. Doing so you can expand onto an imaginative journey that takes the reader onto an enchanted ride of vivid exploration and childlike wonder.
I will say though the piece sometimes had a languor to it. So a splash of more colorful language will keep the piece fluid and as enthralling as the rollercoaster.
This was still very enjoyable, and honestly it's a hard piece to critique since it is a story coming from the perspective of a Teddy Bear, and though I never had one I always thought they were a lovable companion to have by one's side.
Thank you.
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