[PancakeBrah]

"I only see the key through the peephole."

Best line.

I've read some of your paragraph pieces when you first started posting here. Didn't leave feedback but thought those were pretty good. This was a little worse, I think. As a rule, I'm not a huge fan of first person narratives unless you find a really strong voice. This was personal, though, so it's fine. I think your wording was a little standard and the rhymes were a bit less complex than I remember from those aforementioned pieces. I liked the second half a bit more than the first. A lot of your wording here was generic for a piece like this, I think. Not bad wording, per se, but nothing unique. You've written better but there's nothing garishly wrong about this drop.