[PancakeBrah]

I think this was just okay. I'm not a fan of twists, really. The fact that the first person narrator was, in fact, a teddy bear didn't really shock me or anything. Just kind of went 'huh, okay'. You still wrote well, but I think you've written better before. Maybe this is just me, and it is weird, but if this read in the same cadence as a 'Night Before Christmas'. Just repeating, over and over. The rhymes weren't as good as your usual standard. Far from a bad piece but not as good as your average, I think.

keep that quill metriculatin'!