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Kin
This was more of poetry than rap --- I didn't take any time to 'drop rhymes' or keep things in a musically schematic structure. However, your advice is very good; thank you.
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Zen, I see your points, and I read some of them before... I'll probably stop using this site soon and then you'll be so happy.
I'm probably too overzealous in my actions here because its been years since I was getting thousands of hits on my myspace blog -- LOL.
Maybe I'll just stick to the OM Cypher topic, that way people don't get bumped down... I just put feeling into words I write and then when people disrespect them it rubs me off in a negative way, which probably doesn't help my writing. I know I'm not as skilled as many of the emcee's and poets that post on this forum, but if they're not posting new shit... then I won't read it.