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Old 04-03-2013, 03:59 PM   #14
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2 played approaches IMO.. still:

Top5 - rhymes & internals were decent, but not spectaculor.. flow was on point. because the approach was played, you had to force in a cheesy little twist so that it wasn't predictable.. but that in itself was predictable.. the highlights of your verse for me came in the descriptive imagery:

the smoke flows through the psychic's haggard fingers
and hides in the darkened corners where the daggers linger


^ thought that was a great descriptive opening bar

Inno - again, a fairly predictable story.. as soon as I read the first bar I was thinking "damn.. you just ruined it for me", no lie. I think you did a decent job, it was entertaining, it flowed well, the rhymes were decent. there was nothing 'wrong' with the verse, but then nothing really jumped out at me where I was like "that was dope!!" y'know? it all just kinda went along until it finished. and it felt like that because you told me the end at the start..

quite a close battle, fairly enjoyable.. gonna go for the technically superior verse seeing as both takes on the topic were played. vote top5
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