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Old 09-16-2014, 11:00 PM   #3
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^Good feedback, going to agree with Veritas in a general way. I liked the honesty in the beginning. It reminded me of how grounded a person is translating to how wise they are about life. It read like you had a mini-epiphany and wanted to record your thoughts and platitudes before they vanished into "clear decay." Interesting wording there.

I let it pass slow, now life is like a latched door.
I only see the key through the peephole.
^The second line is dope. I think you should expand on that into another piece.

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