[Venom]

cdm - topic was dope, loved the references and the points you made throughout the verse, but felt as though the flow and rhymes were quite basic.. I've seen stuff you've done in the past on other sites, so I know you're capable of sending a message without sacrificing anything when you put the effort in, so this just screams to me that it was rushed for whatever reason. still, some nice lines in there and I felt you tackled the topic at a deep level rather than just at face value, which is always a good thing.

ink - first thing I noticed was the flow, much smoother than cdm's. your choice of vocab & rhymes helped. some lines felt a bit forced to me personally.. eg, when a sentence ends with "..but now will lack" that just seems like a forced ordering of words.. might just be me, but it bothers me. to be honest, there's not much else I can criticise you for. you approached the topic in the same way I would, which appealed.. and you didn't disappoint. you had some inciteful lines, such as:

A dove's outside the cage she lived, she'll never have to sing again
And in her place, it must be him, that wears the collar and the chain
I see her flitter back and forth, the pitter patter of heels worn
She'll thank me once and then forget, I'm forever subject to his scorn

^ loved that

overall, 2 good verses.. but my vote goes to Ink