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Originally Posted by Just Write
damn, this was long haha. so yea i cant see any similarities in how we write lol, you're way better. i would have to say that i liked the first part for its complexity (had to reread if i can be honest lol) the second part for its simplicity, and the last portion for the emotion displayed. i see what you were talking about with the different rhyme scheme experimentation. i was reading up on rhyme schemes and you started out with an abab am i correct? im gunna try that next lol. well i will come back and edit and quote some favorite parts when im not on my phone but one that really stood out to me was about the hope tasting too sour.. word. again man thanks for the advice. i will definitely use it.
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My bad what I meant was you reminded me a lot of myself when I first started out. And yeah, it was abab at the start. Thanks man.