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Old 04-03-2013, 02:30 PM   #16
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cdm - i dont know. in my opinion the onslaught of information that was augmented by the "google it" and "youtube that ish" seemed lazy and without solid backing nor deeper explanation or opinion. as far as the demonization of the american currency goes, im not sure how effective it was, in convincing me the dollar is particularly dangerous, perhaps in that appreciating more rapidly against say the euro, but nothing that can really, honestly, affect someone personally on a small scale for now. perhaps the dangers of credit and loaning are in there, but thats more of a private company thing, sending anyone with a pulse a credit card so they can collect on interest. the flow was incredibly stretched as well. i think the focus on predatory lending wouldve been miles more effective, rather than a rabid deconstruction of the american dollar on all fronts, and you couldve mechanically honed the piece to make it more fluid and easy to read, which wouldve helped your cause as well.

ink - "shell thank me once and then forget" was a real powerful line, and then the ending made it all the more better. i immediately re-read the piece upon completion and could appreciate the thought put into some of the concepts. flow was pretty cool as well. overall, a piece i enjoyed riding

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