[kannon]

Soul. This was really dope. I like that you had a bit of a comedic twist to the end, but it was still complex and well structured. Everything from the red glare to the steel grip. And I really liked the "design of its weaponry" line. Schemes were on point, flow was dope mostly. And it speaks as a metaphor for our obsession with technology. All that shit that I'm sure other people have said. This was really cool. Good job.

Oats. So I read through the piece once and thought it was cool. Really well written as far as the lines being eloquent and sounding all sorts of mushy. But I felt like there was something a little deeper to this piece, so I googled Hokulea. It's a boat. And that made this piece so much better to me. It takes a simple love story between two people that everyone has heard a million times (albeit still beautifully written) and turns it into a mans love affair with the sea. At least I hope to shit that's what this is supposed to be haha. Anyways, I'm trying to knock this out quick, so I apologize if this isn't super thorough, but I liked this a lot. The flow was dope and the language was beautiful. Really solid piece.

This is another close one. I think the realization that oats' piece was deeper than just a love poem made it a stronger piece, definitely. But I still kinda favored Soulstice overall. His piece was just a little more enjoyable to me. The mechanics were pretty even. But soul got me on the creativity.

Vote soulstice