sorry for the abbreviated vote right now, im falling asleep in my chair and will elaborate in the chat thread for next round. in regards to feedback to each writer.
Loved the multidimensionality of Soulstice's verse. Great wording and word choice, especially. There's always a feeling of personality intrinsically attached to everything you write, as if you sample your experience and extrapolate it in profound and creative ways. the verse is a little oddly mechanical in its conclusion, just because of the foreshsdowed letdown that plays a key role in conveying your topic. the distinctly human factor of love. in a way, misunderstanding... or incongruence meeting in a wrapping of fitted curves. statistically evens out be statistics are never fair. this is that math and logic of love boiled down to its essence.
oats. a dream girl with whom things are too good to be true and things feels unreal and rattle apart. that is my first impression. natural imagery is very becoming of your verse. liked the metaphors and figurative language, but some instwnces left me scratching my head. ending was ephemeral but not quite sure-footed. i promise to elaborate.
great battle. botw. I really want to give oats the W for his gorgeous description and gentle, dreamlike narrative tone, but i think the raw industrial message and tinge of disappointment gave SOULSTICE's verse a fantastic and unique interpretation
v/ soul and sorry again forrubgish vote
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