Quite alright. Both took their own advances into their own interpretations. Soulstice took an almost stretched route.....Oats took a more dreamlike love route, which is ok. In originality, I'd say Soulstice clearly edged it! Mechanically I think they were on par for hte most part but oats has this consistent knack of matching things and syllables. Soulstice stretched a bit of his lines, but it worked........ and soulstice also has a knack, I think of rhyming whatever he feels is fit best to just progress the story a bit more. It was quite cool. It pains me to say I think oats had a cool, touching verse. But I think the repitition of moons are reminiscent to bb's piece (not sure if he posted this) and one of my favorite poems from db where one of his moonlight lines are top 10 quotables. I think they had a collaborated effort there. It just seems regular here, and since thats what comes to mind when comparing the metaphor, it doesnt have that luster because of what was done with it already. In 12 lines you did great oats, but I think in a creative edge and overall, soulstice performed a hair better. And I can see it swinging either way. Voting Soulstice!
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