[big baby]

Didn't like it. Thought broke was being very generous. Very straightforward and lacked any punch imo. Feel you do better in cipher threads? Idk, maybe you didn't hit your stride, but it was very confined. Also I felt you use a lot of words but don't really say much. I know we can't feel what you're saying, but atleast create an image of what I think you might be saying or how youre saying it? Also refrain from using ellipsis so often. It's kind of a turn off and it defines too much of what youre going to do and HOW YOU WRITE. It's not good. I dont like them being used much, and very rarely like when they're used. They just aren't in the right state of mind, really. The time you should utilize them, is at the change of heart, or an abrupt burst of something in the other direction. What you're doing is using them as a break for a set-up to the punchline or diss. IT's just a bit staggered, and I don't think it takes you in the right direction. I also think it limits you from what you can do, as a cop-out? idk. The ideas were okay, some of them had a factor but nothing really, THAT crazy. Like I said I think the way you set-up is becoming formulaic, almost. Switch it up, I think.