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Certain · 09-12-2014, 01:23 PM

BROKE LESNAR: The setup and the punchline didn't connect at all. You were going to drop him, presumably off a high structure, to watch him become paralyzed or killed by the fall, but then you shot him in the back? I also am never crazy about generic punchlines in 1-2, especially against well-known members. But the punchline was clever and well-worded.

Meth: The rhyme was really bad here, like you forgot to rhyme and then added that "I say" as though that made up for it. I also don't think a dud can be used to describe a person, and I don't think that the wordplay makes sense with that aspect in there, either. "Broke down a dud" isn't a phrase that means anything related to cars.

Vote: BROKE LESNAR

09-12-2014, 01:23 PM	#10
Certain Mad fucking dangerous. Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 12,066 Battle Record: 40-19 Champed - AOWL Season 3 - Art of Writing League (2x) Rep Power: 85899406	BROKE LESNAR: The setup and the punchline didn't connect at all. You were going to drop him, presumably off a high structure, to watch him become paralyzed or killed by the fall, but then you shot him in the back? I also am never crazy about generic punchlines in 1-2, especially against well-known members. But the punchline was clever and well-worded. Meth: The rhyme was really bad here, like you forgot to rhyme and then added that "I say" as though that made up for it. I also don't think a dud can be used to describe a person, and I don't think that the wordplay makes sense with that aspect in there, either. "Broke down a dud" isn't a phrase that means anything related to cars. Vote: BROKE LESNAR __________________ I'm just swinging swords strictly based on keyboards, unbalanced like elephants and ants on seesaws.