[Paradigm]

Originally Posted by Gamble

With raps I continue to excel.. I do creativity well
And listen facts is u getting Cracked, for having No Liberty................................ Bell.
stop doing so many periods. this is played punch. scheme is ok need to tie in the liberty part in someway.
Precision is swell, aim perfected cave ya chest in...
Basic segment of rage with weapons.................. displayed on this slain contestant.
No content here. You're just rhyming here and nothing that stands out.
Angry message...
I'm a problem.. He ain't getting no fire started, with his endeavor
Now it's time..
I show 'Camp Out of his mind'.. next time try 'visioning rubbing two sticks together'.
lol you shouldve set this up better. this was funny as fuck tbh lol. when you diss someone in swag and flow you need to make yourself look better in the process or it doesnt work
Maybe that's what's better for this dick to b clever... I bring this guy danger
......................................... I give this fucking peasant sudden death like a tie breaker.
cool ending. again, need to tie it in better and swag it out yamean.
Trust me for a second... This is something u mustn't get in..
Break his damn leg............ I'm Giving Campaign.... like he was Running for Election.
Cool nameplay but again you need to make yourself look better when you diss in snf

Originally Posted by Camp Bell

ya writing strong when you strike a poem?


blood pumps through my cryo'd heart, son my typos might go hard
got my stripes twice by snatching the life of pi from that tigers jaws
never saw the movie but i get it.. this is cool
you a vet on the netcee wave? lets see, jet ski race with tritons drawn
i'll end lyfe at the finish line, thats a dead sea grave in poseidons lawn
cool imagery but im not feelng the concept
visually, the chemistry in my ability to enter keys is too hype for words
literally, lyfez blue sky was nice an calm til walter white met heisenberg
ehhhhh
my threads special, i'm the next electro to this max dillon inspired nerd
obnoxious as harry osborne, breaking the bars of oscorps psycho ward
semi ok
we in the dungeon wit double dragons, gambling trouble, ya dice is short
i brought hammer and spike to war, bludgeoned action, you'll die for sure
nah not feeling

Both lacked in content. Gamble had some disses but they werent worded good for snf. Both had schemes. Camp Bell had some cool idea that just came across poorly. You're trying to hard to rhyme sophisticated and should focus more on metaphors and swag and a lot less on the flow. Same with you gamble. Check out the S&F mag in the front office. The top lines in that are what you should be aiming for. I'm not trying to be harsh but you guys are active and I want you both to get better. Keep writing.

Vote - Camp