[Ink]

Red Glare:
After reading the first five lines, I felt a sense of redundancy. The lines were fun to read, but I think you invested too much space into establishing happiness. Especially the "furthest expression; from that of annoyed" portion. You conveyed the message, more than elaborated, and then repeated it.. Repetition happens later on too, but in these later cases it was with more purpose, shorter, and tastefully done. The rhymes were obviously there and well done as well. The way you captured different areas of the world and also brought it down to smaller scales, such as the rabbit, was nice.

Frank:
"huge leaves; that caught the weather. " dope. The imagery and overall pace of this piece was well done. Caught some spelling issues and such, but nothing fatal. Liked that "sand script" line, but wished you hadn't spelled out the wordplay for us. What I found most interesting is where you decided to stop your story. I think alot of people would have dove into the battle that would ensue, but you chose it end it right there. It was intriguing and left the reader to picture the rest..

Vote - Frank. I liked both, but Frank's story here really drew me in. I could see the forest and crap like I was there..