[Sho Money EMG]

Nicely done. Stayed on topic, the message was there. Cool structure, very poetic.

I twist & I grasp how ignorant and foolish I had been
not to mention the brilliant schooling I had missed
the love connections I could of had
I know no ones perfect but truly... it made me sad
as I'm teary eyed I look at the lessons I taught my grandson
I can't clearly hide that the past held my thoughts for ransom
I'm speechless as nothing seems to escape my mouth
I'm reaching towards bleakness, minds a drape or shroud..

This was my favorite part. The structure helped me keep track of the flow. This was a good display of wit. Very poetic. enjoyed this read.

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