[Split]

Hm. I liked both verses. I think Jilti's verse had greater aspirations, but the execution wasn't up to par throughout- a heavy setback at this stage in the tournament & with only ten lines to craft. The delivery especially could have been crisper, after the first four lines the cadence fell out of sync. Some cool descriptives, I liked tetrad fractal and some of the bible references. The sensory details were wholly organic, and the phrasing followed. Enjoyed kannon's take on the topic, except I didn't like how he kinda fed off of Jilti's verse. I get that it's kinda lighthearted and it was an original take, but at the same time I do not think he would have written the same verse had Jilti waited to post. Kannon had great mechanics and decent imagery/ details/ all that meat of a verse. But mostly his delivery stood out. It was also a good story that showcased a lot of plot action for so few lines.


Very close IMO, almost a toss-up. The strengths and weaknesses of each writer weigh on one another in almost perfect tandem. Toughest battle so far to vote on (still have PentSoul), but I think I have to give it to Jilti for just saying and alluding to so much with his weighty words. Really painted a grand picture for me and left me fulfilled