Jliti- i feel like you have a good part of a larger verse, but didn't say a whole lot in this shorter limit. you built a solid atmosphere, but then ran out of lines to actually say anything. i also think a few of your lines were a bit stretched in the flow department. while i don't really practice any religion, i am interested in religion in general so i did like the biblical references.
Kan- "Never get high on your own supply" overall i like it. it accomplished being complete in 10 lines, which is the toughest thing to do in this tournament. it was a straightforward take on the topic that worked, even if it wasn't anything special. the storytelling was very good, even if the story itself was just "eh." i think you did enough to win this round because of what jilti's verse lacked and because everything in your verse was at least decent, but i definitely wasn't wowed by anything in this verse either.
VOTE= Kannon
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