The FlapJack- this was pretty dope. some solid imagery. the 1970s film line was dope. the writing was very solid. didn't really like the fulcrum and folk strum lines. felt like that was reaching a bit. the imagery was dope, as was the back and forth from drug thoughts and feelings to sober ones.
Mike- not a fan of this verse in this format of tournament. the rhyming and flow were dope, which were obviously your main focuses, but stretching the shit out of the lines to fit the 10 line max is not something i agree with. seems like a cop out. also, the tie in to the topic doesn't work well for me, and some of the lines don't seem to make a whole lot of sense. dope flex from a rhyming and flow standpoint, but for this tournament format it doesn't work for me.
VOTE= The Griddlecake
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