[Cereal_Killa]

split:

'A Premeditated Study on how the Nostalgia Bubble Bursts"

before i read anymore past this line i just watched "the sunset limited, twice in two days.. I'm feeling this is where you're going.. whether you do or not dope title.. I will proceed :)

I knew it, ok as far as stories go it's a whole new story.. nothing connecting to Sunset ltd except the emotions, the feeling of what the fuck have i done with my life.. fading away to the darkness from choices and beliefs your character thought where indestructible.. LOVE and the feeling we WILL amount to something more.. when reality is everyday life is cool but you captured the poor blokes depression in the realization of that fact.. Dope.. Rhythm of this piece was sick as far as it smoothly oozing into line after line.. your rhyming structure not complete in your face n punchy, but worked well for this piece none the less.. cool drop..

BENT:

"Choke the room with screams beneath a hopeless moon.."

shit ease up mate, i cant cry while reading it.. im not in public.. j/ks that was a fucken brutal line

owh ok.. who said you could master all genre's.. arsehole.. seriously though dude this was sick, i've never seen you touch on a topic like this.. man i aint even seen you do serious poetry before.. that shit was IN-sane.. you have a magnificent way with words and your writers voice is a bloody deep and powerful one.. You took this verse and projecting some all out pain, but in a truly graceful and authentic sense..

dope..

vote = iambent

ahh man this guy, this friggin guy.. watch out folks his goin to the top.. great battle between the two of you.. LOOVVVEENN IT..