[kannon]

Cake pan. I love that the color of the couch is '1970's film.' That might be the best thing I've read this round. Again, your schemes seem to just ignore regular bar structure, but it still somehow all seems to fall into the right place at the end. This piece was cool. These two bitches (I'm going to make them both women in my mind), are scissoring while on this crazy ecstasy trip, and it's such a rush, and then this crash of silence and self realization comes afterwards where they are kind of coming back into the real world. Imagery was dope, definitely painted a vivid picture in ten bars. I als liked the simple way you split up the sensations. Kind of bouncing back and forth from the physical to the mental. It's a simple method, but I found it very effective here. Overall good work. Another dope piece from you.

Mike. I honestly don't know how you haven't been disqualified for this verse. This shit is 13-14 bars, easy. If you try to say it's only 7, because that's how many times you pressed enter, every line except the last is over 15 words. And the piece in its entirety is over 150 words. That being said, the flow is dope as shit. Unless each line is supposed to be one bar, then your flow is just shit. And I think bar 5 is actually 3 bars. I like that you kept the same rhyme scheme throughout the whole thing, except where the decision to do that became a detriment to your wording. In fact I found myself screwfacing at a few of these lines. "broken and smashed" seemed superfluous. "notion of graphs" doesn't seem like thats how english is supposed to work. "I enbalm with an adam bomb" doesnt make sense, and I'm pretty sure Adam Bomb is just an old school wrestler. And I don't feel like you accomplished anything at the end. The whole piece seemed to be "People are trying to play down my accomplishments, and say I fell off. Well I'll show them..." and then the ending was just, "...One day." From a technical stand point, this is dope (for a 14 bar verse) from the flow to the schemes, etc. But from a story stand point, it just fell a bit flat.

The vote is for the spanish breakfast