El pancake - I liked this a lot. 1970s film was one of the most creative descriptors I've read in the tournament. Same with cumulus clouds. The wording of the piece would be over the top if each word wasn't so descriptive and gave to the color of the piece. Until the ending when you used your most normal language which seemed to predict a gray scale environment when the sober mornings come, which contrasted well against the colorful drug manufactured environment of false happiness. Only thing you didn't touch on enough were the feelings of the characters. Acting like the sun won't rise gives a feeling of party people enjoying their drugs. What's going on with them? That's what I got from the piece. Dope piece though one of my favorites this round.
Mike. This was cool. Original and interesting to break this verse out in this settting. The flow was cool and there was some decent wordplay but overall there wasn't enough conceptually to overtake the contrasting feeling in pancakes verse. Execution was good but there was a missing dimension that you need when faced with a verse like cakes.
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