Pancake wrote a interesting dilemma filled drama in 10 lines. Props for that. Vivid imagery as well. Mikes rhyme scheme was really good. I read it twice just to figure out what it was about. I'm not sure how I feel about it. This was tied together very loosely, if at all. Like you just started free flowing and went shit, gotta relate this to the topic, let me throw it in here in this last bar. It's kind of a shame because it is well structured.
Vote, Pancake.
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triplet syllables for minimal criminals.
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