[kannon]

I apologize if my votes aren't as in depth as usual, I'm reading and voting on my phone right now.

Cormier: cool little piece. I feel like this is very different from what I usually read from you, which is kind of a nice change. By the time I got to the swingline bar, I knew who it was. I was kind of on the fence with how well spoken, or well-thought he sounded, but you addressed that at the end too haha. My only real complaint is that it was pretty by the books. we didn't learn anything new about Milton, except that he thinks better than he speaks. It was fairly matter of fact otherwise. this is what happened. It would have been cool to dive into his psyche a little more. But overall, cool piece. Nice ending.

Split: it took me a couple reads to really capture everything. But this was dope. Obviously your schemes and cadence was a bit all over the place, but the story was told well. On this platform, I don't know if I like that though. In places I was able to find little weird inner rhymes, but in other places it appeared as if flow and rhyme were just kind of thrown out the window. That being said, your piece definitely invoked more emotion, and had more depth to it. The main dude is in love with some BITCH who married some DICKHEAD and the main dude is like "I'd rather love you from afar than be part of a failing marriage" which is like word. But he's kind of a pussy. But you still kind of feel for him. Overall, good story, but the mechanics were kind of shit.

This is a tough vote. The part of me who likes mechanics wants to give it to Cormier. But I feel like split really out-storied corm... Ugh. I'm gonna give it to Split. But step your mechanics up if you're still here next round.