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Old 04-02-2013, 12:07 PM   #14
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Agree with zygote this is like voting against the same writer and it all honesty I see nothing wrong with either verses. Props.

Red glare: Dope use of multis throughout this piece. Each line was heavily descriptive in just a few short words. Very impressive. Also the use of the 'oy' rhymes throughout was great. It really helped to link the piece together and continue the story along. Best post I've seen of you.
Frank: Each time I read one of your pieces it gives this smooth/slick feeling when I read them and this verse was no exception. As with red's verse yours was extremely descriptive without being long winded. Your use of multis seemingly with no effort is impressive as well. Near flawless piece.

Overall I gotta go with Frank tha Tank in this one. It's fuckin close though forreal. Props you two.
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