Vulgar, my vote may be biased due to an obsession with aliens. I don't like to give out praise and praise without giving some comment but really felt like your writing was great with no error. You were giving substance to the alien race, providing allusion to their motivations, views on humanity and their history. Also, combining these elements, while using expressive and extensive vocabulary/references. E.g., the Zanzibo -anecdote lines.
Witty, that was good thought for connecting to the topic, too often the television and media outlets provide an outpouring of cruelty to consumers. The I see repetition was good because the character was watching the television, although you could have strengthened this by perhaps having it repeated only every so often and not every line. Also enjoyed theme of hope at the end, felt like that was the "humanity defies cruelty" part of the topic, and focusing the human aspect is great when contrasting to the almost constant assembly line output of cruelty through the television. Overall voted for Vulgar.
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