MKG: this wasn't a bad verse, not at all. but I guess it's such an ever-present concept in not only topical writing, but writing in general (plus plenty of hip hop songs to boot), that it doesn't resonate with me much. there's something blasé about it, just not a fresh take.
Frank: I think your storytelling was solid here, you definitely have a flair for the dramatic, and the building engulfed in flames suited you well. I really dug the moth to the torch of humanity line, too. overall, you had a more ethereal experience imbued in your writing, and it caught my attention.
Vote: Frank
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