[Adonis]

Vote Vulgar

Witty - Decent start, i loved... "It's dark, but the rays she radiates from her face will bring light"...I see you rhyming a plenty, just be cautious as to choosing the correct word. This was a good start to a verse, nothing more....

Vulgar - "These visitors from the Northern Gemini’s were universally lauded, and recognized...As the most empathetic race in the multiverse:" Creamed my panties, you are entering delicate world that is most true so far."They were simply immaterial, in peaceful existence, ancient, compelled...To preserve every nation of health at every far corner, solar system or atrium belt"...More amazing writing here..."The alien race crowed so loud that their tracheas swelled,...Henceforth, it was a nightmare to compare this dreadful species to their sapient selves" I fear you are beginning to match rhyme with meaning. Not a good thing for the rest of us, I vote Witty in a beneficial "cock-block" fashion. "Sayonara" is not Latin."Native blood/ Blades and Grunts" Who are you??? I love the fact that you are actually "rhyming first", then meanings second. Although that gives you a disservice because you are melding them together and excreting a rather fluid, yet meaningful matter of words. A story of earth and its parasites, who have grown to create resentment from the creators..."a bug eyed" alien kind who know true peaceful knowledge. Exterminate as the cockroach vs. a boot, or however you put it, ingenious as usual, only I see a more developed rhyme pattern which I both fear and so badly want from you. Gold, thus far front runner for VOTW compared to my other 6-8 verses read.