[kannon]

copypat. I just... That's the payoff? Droopy tits? She's materialistic, conceded, clearly not too intelligent if her only goal in life is to have tits. And the whole payoff for her living this trite, contrived life is that her tits droop? But she's still married and proud of her kids. So really, everything's gonna be okay. Aside from the wording here being awful, this piece went nowhere. "thin as a stick be," "she was a barbie cause yo," Poise is something a person possesses. Not something you can take life with. It's not a grain of salt. Maybe she LIVED life with poise. Damnit, I gotta be honest man, I don't like this piece at all. People made fun of her for being flat chested, but rather than her developing a personality or a sense of self, she eventually gets tits and then everything is okay. She grows up and becomes a homemaker, has a good life, minimal stress, and great kids. It seems like she's rewarded for being a bimbo. And the recourse to all of this is that her tits didn't hold up. Meh.

Diode. You're gonna really have to fuck up to lose this one. And you didn't, congrats. I like this shit a lot actually. Vocab is dope, but not superfluous. Alliteration like a muthafucka. schemes are dope. Yeah man, describing the teams colliding as "uprising crests" was dope imagery. the only forced part I saw was "grimace and frown." expressed as a noun, it should be frowns or a frown or something, right? I don't know, just sounded weird. And I didn't like how you used "lb" and "qb" instead of "linebacker" and "quarterback" which are both big syllable words. Makes your bars look normal length, but that shit was stretched haha. But overall, this shit was dope.

Not even close. CopyPat wins by a mile.


I'm kidding. Diode crushed.