[PancakeBrah]

Soulstice:

Dope. Recursive confusion was a bit off to me but invertebrate eunuch was good description. I liked your approach to the topic and your flow/rhyming may have been the best of all the verses I've read. The way you wrote reminded me of Split Eight's verse. Not mechanically but in the imagery and feeling it imparted. Also, car with girl. So similar. This was nice because you really felt the nostalgiac tone you were actually writing about through the piece itself. Very good stuff.

Objective:

Not bad. I think your style is more suited for longer, more epic style pieces. You wrote decently and your approach to the topic was fine. Nothing stood out, to me, though. The schemes were all pretty standard and you didn't have those conceptual lines that made me think or go 'damn'. Some of your wording was off, especially with this line;

"sharp as a blade is the games that's warped to be played."

Just clunky. I think you would have been well served to refine your piece a little bit and add some degree of difficulty.

Not a bad battle. I think Soulstice won pretty handily, though, taking this one on all fronts. Thanks for the read.

v/Soulstice