Soulstice - Some "rush''...... vocabulary was out of this league - came off like a mockery - idea deserved more credit I thought - you kinda threw it under a magic school bus though so it wasn't that careless. It wasn't corny but it did feel sarcastic a lil. The 3 bar schemes were refreshing to see; I picked up on that. You wrote a well tailored verse, I'm trying to find something wrong with it. I enjoyed this verse; you lived up to the hype. That I could say.
Innovator - Tale of hopelessness magnified by your online woes. Like a closer look into the mind of AOWLs notorious free poster. True to yourself; you capture the down and out mentality of a druggie gone mad. The concept is universally known; but it has not been attempted in 7 weeks in over 100 verses. Finally. You mentioned horrocore, style of rhyme, early in the week and I feel you have brought the idea to life.
I am Voting for Innovator because I was not in the mood for a wizard verse on this night; I was more impressed with The Innovator this week, capitalizing on a risk and winning; not by literary devices - Heart.
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