cereal - same sentiments as the previous voter had. a little muddled here and there. overall i got the inner chaos of a lowest-common-denominator character in terms of civil rights, which i guess sort of deserved a little muddled chaos. but i would of course prefer more clarity. the flow was allright but in some places it was also scattered throughout. the sleep/waking contrast between the piece was your saving grace, and the concept was executed well, regardless of the chaotic imagery that i had trouble connecting to one another, let alone the overall concept. after a few rereads i can say that this was a solid verse, though.
kk- sleep is the cousin of death. a dream is the furious sister.
you can't pay the reality check without cashing in when you kiss her.
that was tight. this was really dope i thought. the cyclical evolution of a killer that i believe is the detective reaching insanity. excellent foreshadowing throughout the bit, i was thinking he would become the killer but the way you made it happen was refreshing. the imagery of the ocean and glass box and such was one of the best images of the week. so dope. flow was also on point. great verse i thought, good character development, and excellent story telling techniques
v - king keith. ck came correct but king keith went hard this week
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