i definitely like the rhyme schemes in timeless's verse..
the ending i just found to be somewhat weaker than the rest of the verse..
perhaps i am picky but i don't like the phrase "my Dad grew fear".
and the final line about mom shaming him-- and the "Many blame games adrift." sentence-- to me seemed a bit uncreative compared to the rest of the verse.
cormier dealt with an oft-discussed topic of history, but it was a smart approach for the assigned topic. plus i felt it was executed superbly.
a build-up of quality descriptions & images ending with a question. i actually like the ending having a question...found nothing wrong with it, in fact i think it was the right way to go after what was said beforehand. good rhyming/timing as well.
V cormier
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