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Old 08-31-2014, 12:18 AM   #4
Mike Wrecka
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cool battle


MKGs verse was pretty basic in the sense that it contained only single syllable rhyming. which I usually hate but for some reason was able to look past here. to a degree. I really enjoyed the take on the topic, not the first thought that pops in your head. like don't physically look down. you took the approach of don't look down on people, because they are victims of circumstance. it is a preachy message but the verse didn't come off preachy.


frank , really didn't like how you stretched your lines here. the format threw me off in a few spots. you tried to get every last word into your story here. but lets be honest, you got caught in a rhyme string of words that are usually used by rookies in this game.

agony, humanity , apathy , catastrophe. that's cringe worthy. and hurt the verse. the story line itself was pretty straightforward



I got MGK in a huge upset


vote - MGK
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