Phar - Felt like an interesting short story, just missing a few key elements of rhyme format. For half of it, the rhyming part. I actually read it 3 or 4 times and really enjoyed what was written. Would've got my vote in a free form poetry contest.
Pinot - Noone ever takes this route with topicals, and I'm glad you did it and actually did it well. Made me laugh a bit. Well written structure wise and any other way.
If phar had any semblance of structure or a rhyme I feel like this would've been a very difficult battle to vote on.
Vote, Pinot.
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triplet syllables for minimal criminals.
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