Zygote - A cold and icy incantation told with cool indifference. At first judging by the title I felt waves of a "Human Centipede" like twist coming but you didn't go that route and didn't try and exaggerate the surgical twist, pun intended. Some parts melded into one another while some had very solid wording, like the third and fourth bars. I think that because your personality meshes so well with these select types of scientific penmanship methods, a verse like this will always win over the crowd due to it being "so you." Authentic characteristics of someone who really does steep his life and research in science, as it seems on the surface. Crazy flip on the topic too.
adonis - That's creative that you did a continuation from one of your previous pieces in this league. I won't read the other one yet because I want this one to stand alone independently. If my interpretation is correct, this is an example of incest birth: father and daughter have a baby and the baby makes a subconscious choice to kill his mother while he is born. He has intense feelings of contempt towards his makers and their foul doings. The writing was sharp in this one; I was impressed with the path you took and how you conducted yourself along it. Smart, thought provoking writing.
This vote will be somewhat difficult. I liked both verses. Zygote had a technically savvy verse, a little metallic in flavor with a horror element to it. Adonis' was more intricate with character interaction. The birth of the child was tumultuously described and a tint of incest added in for good measure. The ending could also be open to multiple interpretations which I like (unless I got my first interpretation wrong and there is only one correct interpretation)
I'm going to vote Adonis here. Stellar battle to both of you.
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