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Old 08-29-2014, 11:12 AM   #6
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Note..

I don't budge when old fucks push my patience, eyes low and seethin'
You're mentally weak and lack energy, kid. So as hard as you try, you can't move me like failed Psychokinesis
nope
A stale pile of feces is more "The Shit" than you'll ever be
NOBODY FEELS YOU, and it's CLEARLY not because we lack empathy...
short and to the point, liked it
Your efforts are never seen as effective with lines parallel to these
And from the Right Angle, Not Even Hypothetically
saw where u were trying to go with this but was not effective
Don't need a Long Thread to prove he's Bitch-Made, so this punk stays nervous
Cross Dressin' like Christian Women at Sunday Service
too much of a reach
Lift your skirt, and I see that you ain't from the hard-knocks
If you've ever seen Sham Rock, it was probably in your Lucky Charms Box
lol dope nameplay/flip
Get laid Face Flat on the Ground for exuding some ruthlessness
Put your Up-Side Down like Odd Future did to the Crucifix
sick multis, overall fresh concept. Liked this alot
I'm the God of this rap shit. Your crew gets throttled for breaking my sole commandments
If you Gruesome Intellect, you'd be Smart Enough to not follow your Man's Sin / Manson
couldnt been dope but fell flat
But, copycats reenact mistakes... So, it's best to Zip It Up before you catch the Body-Bag treatment fast;
Free At Last! Like Martin Luther's speech "I Have A Dream" before the heater-blast...
something different. Creative, feeling this. Could've shortened up the set-up line


Gamble..

This homos whack... I'll merk em in seconds, once I choke this fag?
Ill Carry Note across the Bridge before The Drop like I was harmonizing in Vocal Class.
sick metaphors, rhyme schemes. Dope punch
I sever this fag, once I step on a track I'm sending him fast
Let's face it u were nvr good at text,Book.. Mayb if u read 1 in class ud b better an pass.
Damn! another dope punch. multis on point
This faggot couldn't save the strength to make a grade. Try an sway an pay.
Cus If this lame complains....... I'll have Bookmarked for tryna fucking Change the Page.
nice. multis bringing everything together
Once I step on this Note, they'll be nothin left to expose
Ill stab this bitch w/ an effortless poke,
.......................... Pull out a Key and Peele his wig back faster than a Sketch on the Show.
very solid punch. name flips crazy
This fucking delinquent will suffer once I cut an I rip shit.
Keep frontin w/ a Hard Cover, Book...... N end up on the Edge of a Destructive Condition.
this coulda been lotb, had so much potential but fell flat at the end
This a David vs Goliah an I doubt seeing this pest fight
.................... you'll see him Jet from facing a Giant... Like this was Preseason @ MetLife.
liked this
This kid is worthless, n U don't wanna meet in person I'm very violent
Show your mug, & end up getting ur Face Bashed..... worse than The Roast of Paradigm.
eehh okish
U might consider this Peer Pressure when I drop Notebook.. this cocks Over
So ima Hand u ur first L u seeing on the Sight..... like Medical Marijuianna for Glaucoma.
cool closer



Note had hits n misses. enough attempts were there to make his verse an enjoyable read. Gamble was killing the nameplays on Notebook. Fell off a little in the 2nd half of his verse but was consistent overall.

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