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Old 08-28-2014, 01:22 AM   #2
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You might be spending too much time around @CopyPat. This verse was excellent, though. The rhymes were fresh, and the humor actually was funny. I'm not sure how I'd prefer to hear this rapped: A deadpan style could work, but the humor might be better with a more goofy, off-center delivlery. There were a couple of bumps that I think would be evident upon edit, but these were my favorite sections:

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Tryna get it till it cooks her ovaries over easy.
Each egg's like a breakfast snack, but bloody.
Oh buddy, I beat the crap out of that infected snatch.
I'm pumping fast. It's out of this world. My dick's in orbit.
Shit, she kills it. Then I let her fuck it rigamortus.
Sit on my face. I want to be waterboarded.
A tongue so sharp, when I start, you'd think she got aborted.
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Her tongue slidin through my bowels and playing peekaboo dude;
It sticks out real quick, from the tip of my dick
If I spot it, and grip it, then I'm the shit and I win!
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