[IamBenT]

Zen - Great job on the rhyme scheme, its so impressive to read this and see it done well and creatively with smart word choices, because anyone who has tried it (and I am one such person) recognizes how difficult it is to do throughout a verse while STILL being true to the story and avoiding boring rhymation ie rhyme for rhyme's sake. I think like Nigma said this was solid like 90% of the way in terms of said scheme. The story itself is interesting, I would have liked to know more about Dave, and especially more about Stan who seems to be one of those psychotic law enforcement people, and his reason for blasting Dave in the face didn't fit right for me, as I didn't get a good feel as to why he would do it, besides Dave's inherent evil. just hard to believe for me, but other than that a really creative and well-written verse.

Quotes:

Inspector Matheson proclaimed, 'Stan have this faggot arrained in the cabin with Shane.
Hey you bastard!! Don't you have any shame!?'hilarious

He replyed, 'No it's a habit that became a labyrinth of pain.
I'm savage. Insane. An addict contained in a cavern of brains.' Scary stuff

Kuja - Near flawless flow in this verse. I have seen many many verses on Jack the Ripper, but its usually during all of his Ripping, so this was fresher in terms of looking at the fact the nigga was never caught and was probably chilling somewhere watching London go nuts trying to find him. WHERE's mothafucking Sherlock Holmes when you need him, shit? I digress.. Great attention to detail, the word choice is steller, the Title takes me back to that Johnny Depp movie, and showing us how the murdering brought the doctor peace would have made the verse better for me, but its nitpicking. Solid showing!

Quotes:

Blind fools! they need only scratch beneath the surface
To see my public service, I made a whole city nervous
They call them murders, failing to see my art had purpose
The streets overcrowded, I moved swiftly like a serpent
Know this for certain, when you walk alone in the midst
I’ll be working the night shift, shrouded behind the nights mist
I’m giving birth to the 20th century.. Dope


Vote - Kuja for a textbook winning verse.