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Old 08-26-2014, 03:38 PM   #11
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Nice battle.

KnowP: Your bar could've been far more awesome if you tweaked that first line. I might come off picky, but that "feeling this aim, drive" took away from the bar a little. Filler'ish. But, still, I found this to be a pretty dope punch with some unique wordplay...although, we don't know if Jilti is actually scrawny or not. That's an unverifiable personal, lol; but, other than that, I dig it.

Jilti: These are some clean lines. You didn't slack off with the set-up, and it flowed nicely into the Gorgeous / Gorges flip...giving us a pretty enjoyable bar that's more "in-your-face" than anything.


Vote: Jilti. Much cleaner and hard-hitting. I just sensed more consistency.
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